Corinthians

i have found that the voice over that i have written isn't quite liong enough. An iconic reading that is used at wedding is Corinthians 13 from the Bible. it is a passage about love and i think that it will fit in woith my film and therfore i will use sections of it with my voice over.

If I speak in the tongues of men or of angels, but do not have love, I am only a resounding gong or a clanging cymbal. 2 If I have the gift of prophecy and can fathom all mysteries and all knowledge, and if I have a faith that can move mountains, but do not have love, I am nothing. 3 If I give all I possess to the poor and give over my body to hardship that I may boast, but do not have love, I gain nothing.
4 Love is patient, love is kind. It does not envy, it does not boast, it is not proud. 5 It does not dishonor others, it is not self-seeking, it is not easily angered, it keeps no record of wrongs. 6 Love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth. 7 It always protects, always trusts, always hopes, always perseveres.
8 Love never fails. But where there are prophecies, they will cease; where there are tongues, they will be stilled; where there is knowledge, it will pass away. 9 For we know in part and we prophesy in part, 10 but when completeness comes, what is in part disappears. 11 When I was a child, I talked like a child, I thought like a child, I reasoned like a child. When I became a man, I put the ways of childhood behind me. 12 For now we see only a reflection as in a mirror; then we shall see face to face. Now I know in part; then I shall know fully, even as I am fully known.
13 And now these three remain: faith, hope and love. But the greatest of these is love.

Voice over

After some audience feedback I realised that the audience feel as though my film is more of a music video than a short film. To address this issue I have decided that I will use a voive over to tie all the narratives together.
Here is the first draft of the voice over.
Is it the love of reading a book? Is it the love of a cold ice-cream on a hot summers day? Is it the touch of someone’s hand in yours? Is it your first school crush? Your first love? Passing notes and holding hands down corridors. Is it waking up with the sun shining through your window?

Is it those moments waiting for someone? Is it knowing they really care and forgive your faults, no matter what? Is it the house you grew up in? The house where your children grew up? Is it growing old together?

Holding hands, kissing, the tender moments shared. Halved. Ingrained in your memory. A memory you will never forget. Never forget and always remember.

They will always be there in your heart, in your memories, in the places you shared.

Let them take your breath away and give them your heart openly. Accept there love and cherish every smile, for this is only one life and it’s better together.


Love
Verb
Loves, loving, loved
To have great attachment to and affection for
To have passionate desire, longing and feelings for
To like or desire
To make love to To be in love

Music

For my short film I have decided to use two different tracks. For the begining of the film I want to use an upbeat happy song to show the happy emotions of the characters who are in love and for the second half of the film I want to change the mood by using a sad song. For the first song I have used a track by Matt Lungley who I found on Youtube and for the second song I have used a local musician, Kenneth Kas.

http:///vwKWyIYxk2o youtu.be

http://youtu.be/EGZEhbeA8YY

Editing the new scene

I have edited the new scene and added fades to the end and I have added it to the rest of the film. I placed this scene at the begining of the film so as the film progresses the people get older showing love through time. I have moved the symbolic clips of Gill around so they are through out the film. I still need to tighten the editing so it is all quicker and add the last few transactions.

Last scene

For the last scene I am going to film I have decided to set it in school. I am going to use some year 10 students anmd set it in a class room. There will be several students sat at desks working with a boy and a girl at either end. The boy will quickly glance up at then girl and then the girl will quickl;y look up at the boy. The boy will then write a love note and fold it up before we see what it says. He will then pass it to his friend who will pass it to her firend who will pass it to the final girl but someone will snatch it before it gets there. The boy who snatched it will then look at it and hand it back to the girl. It will cut to a shot of the girl and boy walking hand in hand down a corridor and then cut back to the note on the desk and zoom in on the writting which will say i love you.

Editing new scene

I have now edited the new symbolic scene with the two scenes of the young and old couple. Instead of using a linear narrative I have interspersed the symbolic scenes within the two narratives as a cut away. The film starts with Gill folding flowers. It then cut to the scene of Gill and Kegan together, a cut away of gill and then it fades to the scene of jean and Terry before finishing with anothe shot of Gill smiling. Although the film feels near completion I still think it needs another scene add more romance. I think it needs to be in a different location and use a different set of characters and show romance in a different situation.

Filming the new symbolic scene

I have decided to film Gill against a white background and use soft lighting to enhance the clips and make them more romantic. She will be folding blue and purple flowes which will then be put on wire to form a bouquet. For this scene I want gill to wear a jumper and trousers and again to have her hair down. I will use close up shots of her hands and her face. I think I will also use some pictures of Gill for my poster.

Editing new scene

I have edited the new scene and it works well. It keeps all the elements of romance and fits my genre. I now need to edit the two scenes together and make sure they link and that the audience understands the narrative. I think to do this I will need to film more footage but perhaps use a more synmbolic scene.

I think that for the symbolic scene I will use Gill as the main focus and film her folding paper flowers, representing the flowers Kegan gave her. During editing I will speed this up.

Shot log and filming review

Here is the shot log for the days filming.

Today the filming went really well. I hope when editing I will be able to get the continuity of the clips right and that the scene flows and isn't disjointed.

Call sheet

Call sheet for the day of filming.

Costume and Props

For this scene I want the young couple to be in modern clothes. For Gill, I want her to wear a coat and jeans and some gloves. I'd like her to have her hair down so it is more feminine. For Kegan, I want him to wear jeans, jumper and coat. I think this will represent a large audience as it easy to relate to.

For the props I will need a bunch of flowers for jkegan to give to Gill. I think I will use a bunch of simple flowers, perhaps roses. Flowers are an icon of romance and I think they would work well in the sinario I have created.

Story Board

Here is the story board for the new footage with the young couple:

Difficulties with new plot

Unfortunately when I wanted to film the new scenes Terry was ill again and I could not ask him to do it. I have now decided to again change the narrative of the film. This time I have decided to film footage of the young couple. I want to show a romantic moment between a young couple. I want Gill to be waiting outside the house, looking like she is getting frustrated waiting for someone. It will then cut to Kegan running up the street to meet her, holding a bunch of flowers. When he gets to Gill he will tap her on the shoulder and then give her the flowers. They would then kiss, so show he is forgiven and add another element of romance.

Story board

Here is the storyboard for the new proposed footage.

New Narrative

After the audience feedback of my first rough cut I realised that with out the footage of the young couple the narrative would not make sence and it is hard for the audience to get the concept of the film. I have therefore decided to change the narrative of the film and re write the plot. I want to keep all the edited scenes of the older couple and add in some new footage to make the plot clearer.
My first idea to change the plot is to have the old man sitting in an arm chair and looking at photos of himself and his wife when they were younger. It would zoom in on the photos and then the photos would come to life. The photos would be of the younger couple together and then I'd use photos of older people to show the progression of time.

Film review page

Draft of writing for film review page

ForgetMeNot

This is a first for new director Alice White, trained at London College of Communications she won the graduate award for her final show and has now gone on to direct the award nominated work, ForgetMeNot. White lives in London with her musician boyfriend, Kenneth Kas, whose music features on the film.

The first ting you notice when the film begins is the soft and eloquent voiceover, which speaks of love, and it’s different forms. ‘Is it the love of a cold ice-cream on a hot summers day?’ The sumptuous imagery created through the voice over is then supported through the three narratives.

Firstly, the schoolroom, this is where we meet a young girl and boy who steel glances at each other and pass love note. This brings back the nostalgia of youth and innocence. The thought that the only thing in the world is the boy you fancy or the girl who sits next to you in English class.

We then see a very annoyed teenager, stood waiting for someone, a position we’ve all been in. Then, low and behold, her boyfriend is running to meet her with a bunch of flowers in his hand. Another simple message of forgiveness is given through the voice over by the use of an extract from the Bible, Corinthians.

Lastly, we see a lovely elderly couple, hand in hand, walking down the street. Their path takes them through streets and woods, with clever editing this sequence is seamless and almost dream like. The film comes to an end when the couple arrive in their final destination, a graveyard. As the scene slowly fades to reveal the woman gone and the camera zooms out to show us the gravestones, we feel a sense of loss for the elderly man. It reminds us that we are both alone but still surrounded by love, even when we lose someone they will still be there.

White’s combination of beautiful motion and melodic voice are both complimented by the use of music from Matt Lungley and Kenneth Kas, both good friends of Whites, who only add to the romantic atmosphere. Lungley’s upbeat song fits perfectly with the young love and contrasts to Kas’s dark and brooding love song.

Although this film presents itself as a cliché, in many ways it is a love story through time. The passing of notes in school classrooms, holding hands and giving flowers are all icon of romance and enable us as an audience to remember the act of giving to those we love. Perhaps the director is trying to tell us something with this film, give more? Love strongly? Never forget? Whatever the message, this is a truly beautiful and artistic piece of video literature.

Finished Movie Poster

Edited Photos for Poster

Pictures for Movie Poster

Flat plan for Movie Poster

Analysis of movie posters

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